Thursday, April 29, 2004

"I'm smart because I've got cool, hip smart looking glasses"

VonDada writes in response to a UMass Grad Student's statement that Pat Tillman was not a hero and got what he deserved:

" "Mystified, but not surprised." -Sentence fragment

"And, not just the regular army..." -Starts sentence with conjunction

"But, does that make him a hero?" -Ditto

"However, in my neighborhood in Puerto Rico" -Oh! Now I get it.

"pendejo, an idiot" -improper translation (babelfish trans: pendejo = a$$hole)

"decided to insert himself into a conflict he didn't need to insert himself into." -Dangling particle

"knee-jerk" -overused cliche

"sacrificial lambs" -Ditto

"Tillman got himself killed" -redundant reflexive

"our social values are probably more enlightened than theirs." -missing verb

"For that reason..." -unclear reference

"has been wrongly utilized" -split infinitive

"The sad part is that we won't realize it before we send more people like Pat Tillman over to their deaths."

-this entire sentence tends to negate the thesis of "Pat Tillman is not a hero" with it's martyr overtones.


Screw the War on Terror, how about a war on Graduate Student with poor writing skills." (emphasis mine)

The original article is, as they say, farked because of too many hits. The text is posted somewhere on the comments thread, linked below. Comments Thingee (935159)